We say that
with pessimism,
with doubt.
But it is good advice.
When I breathe
I live.
Inspiration is the in-breath.
Inspiration is the life and soul of a party.
I am the party in question.
The question is:
Why should I not be
inspired?
Why should I wish
to be soul-less, life-less?
In all the agitation,
all the tension,
all the hustle and bustle of
the day,
if I can just
Breathe...
Breathe in.
One moment of inbreath.
One moment of inspiration.
I am restored.
I am in equilibrium.
I am human.
Being.
6 comments:
It has taken me quite a few readings to work out what I think about this. I like the theme and the progression between words and ideas. I am abit uncomfortable with the insistence on 'you', but you will probably disagree!
Clearly the title could not change to first person, but would you be more comfortable with "I"? Would we still identify with it?
I think so, or you could use some imperative form (which addresses but without the you. I hadn't thought about it, but the I might work. have you tried it, also using partly the imperative or seeing where the I is not in fact required, only a suggestion though!
I agree with the problem of 'you' and 'I' here. The voice that speaks here is too strong to identify with. It speaks to me from a different place (and remember I sit in a waiting room).
How's that?
Difficult to explain in a blog. We could talk on Thursday if you like.
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